Green fades
to lovely warm shades
of golden brown.
Yellow and red
blend into Autumn.
Leaves fall
with the mercury
drifting down
like snowflakes come to soon.
The warmth of summer departs
as the orange of fall takes over.
The chill begins
it's cold blue takes hold.
Winter's white will be coming soon.
Hello Jessi,
ReplyDeleteThank you for posting this :). This poem is concerned with Autumn in a visual way, as many lines consider different aspects of color: “Green” (1), “warm shades” (2), “golden brown” (3), “Yellow and red” (5). It’s true, that these colors “blend into Autumn” (5) and assist its warmer characteristics. The poem appears in three stanzas that appear well-structured on the page. I appreciate the sense of ambiguity that occurs with the word “fall” (6) at the beginning of the second stanza. Also, “mercury” (7) I think, is a great descriptive word to add into the poem.
The speaker is very narrative in his or her use of visual descriptions, particularly during the last stanza where corporeal sensations are considered through a seasonal transition such as fall:
The warmth of summer departs
as the orange of fall takes over.
The chill begins (10-12).
I think this poem successfully captures the essence of fall and its transition into winter, where “Winter’s white will be coming soon” (15). The last line of the poem that I referenced is a great conclusion. I like the synonymous mentioning of winter, and the way the poem will also transition slowly into its own conclusion.
Thank you for responding to this prompt :)